Review based on experience up to chapter 4.
This will be very subjective and contain spoilers, you have been warned.
1. Renders are top notch and character models are excellent. The girls are really pretty with good variety though perhaps a bit to heavy on the large boobs. This novel seems to go for a believable and realistic style, so not having all the girls have massive boobs would surely help in that regard.
2. Animations are well done and there are plenty of them. However alot of them are in weird places like just walking or someone just sitting. Would have preferred to have more animations in lewd and action scenes instead of these seemingly random spread and not so well cutted into regular scenes.
3. Dialogue is well written and for the most part has a good flow and seems natural and believable. However the banter in lewd scenes is bad, there is no dirty talk and aside from alot of ahhh and mmmh the characters seem to just be having a regular conversation while going at it.
4. The story is quite is all in all quite good and the way it is presented is also for the most part both engaging and interesting. As of chapter 4 there still alot of mystery going on and if it was not for my next point I would probably still be reading instead of writing this review.
The MC, as usual this is the place that most avn falls short and this one is no exception. So much so that he gets his own section of this review, since in my opinion almost everything bad about this novel ties into him.
1. The physical. Very much on the small side in both height and build for a man, as in he is pretty much the same size if not smaller than most of the girls. Does not at all fit with the whole sole protector of the town role he is supposed to have. Comes show already in one of the opening scenes as he is complaining about how hard it is to carry an unconscious girl, that he is rescueing, 20 meters. Not only does he carry her in like 4 different ways that are all wrong if not impossible, but as a policeman he should also have had that type of training and be in shape to do so. I also think the whole supernatural and horror aspect of the story would be much better if put up against a physically capable individual instead of a weakling, to show that despite his competence he is still way out of his depth.
2. Competence and choices. Straight away he makes poor choices, him driving home his pregnant girlfriend to stay at home alone at night when he knows there is dangerous people in town, to then go back and fall asleep at his desk while supposedly watching over an injured girl locked up in a cell is just beyond stupid. Then the choice on what girl to check in on before going home is just wtf, ofc you check in on both of them as you promised. Not only is it your job you also made a promise, but nah lets not keep it so we can get home what 20 min earlier. Then we encounter weird freaky people who are obviously dangerous and does not die even though you shot one of them 3 times in the head, and you dont think it is time to bring out more than just your handgun and do not want to break into the gun store to get more firepower, to not even talking about not even having a shotgun at a sherif department, a little logic please. The choices where you get 2 options and one just leads to game over is also completely pointless and add nothing to the novel. The choice where you chose between believing the squatter girls or the douche brothers also just is a prime example of what an absolute idiot mc is, like he knows these dudes are unstable and drunks so his solution as a police officer is to beat the guy up and tell him to leave them alone, not just illogical but also friggin illegal. Then we have the scene where 4 of these cultist fuckers march up unarmed to the police station and starts demanding to get the girl while throwing threats n stuff, and what does the marshal do, he fucking hides inside and tries to bargain with them. Why does anyone trust this guy to protect anything, he is so damn useless it makes me wanna vomit. Also the situation where he chases this woman to the border of town and he knows if she continue running she will die and he just yells stop, draw you gun fire a warning shot at her feet, hell even shoot her in the leg just friggin stop her from running into certain death.
3. Background and setup. Saddling the mc with a pregnant girlfriend who is obviously a sweet girl bordering on complete angel... is just a bad choice. Like why force the reader to play as a complete asshole to interact with the LI in the novel and to watch the lewd scenes that dev has put effort into making. Seems obvious that it is intended that mc should have relationships with several of the girls, but to do so he has to behave like a despicable garbage cheater. And it also makes Allison and the rest of the LI seem like a bunch ruthless cunts. Ofc I dont know if all this is intentional but it is for sure not my cup of tea. Add this to his other faults and there is pretty much nothing to like about this mc and he drags this whole novel down with him.
A few suggestions on how to improve this mess
1. MC needs to grow some balls and put on his man shoes, and while he is at it grow a head taller and gain 40 lbs. Nobody feels safe with a pathetic weakling in charge and it does not help the credibility of the story to have all the LI be delusional and praise him for being a good guy when he is a frikkin cheater. Let him be smart and manly cause his sissy ntr personality do not fit in this setting, hell it does not even fit with the cheater aspect of the character and it for sure does not fit with good guy protector man of the law perspective that most of the rest of the cast seem to have of him. I really want to continue the story but I just cannot when playing as a guy that pisses me of every time he needs to make a descision.
2. For the whole pregnant girlfriend setup to work, she either needs to be into the whole sharing her man thing from the start or there needs to be options for talking with her about it early on when other women start showing interest and thereby getting her on board. Otherwise you just lose all the audience that are not into cheating and still wanna see lewd scenes.
So to conclude this, if mc got a complete make over character model, choices, background everything except perhaps his face. Then this could pretty easily grab 4 or 5 stars, but as is he drags it down to not worth reading
This will be very subjective and contain spoilers, you have been warned.
1. Renders are top notch and character models are excellent. The girls are really pretty with good variety though perhaps a bit to heavy on the large boobs. This novel seems to go for a believable and realistic style, so not having all the girls have massive boobs would surely help in that regard.
2. Animations are well done and there are plenty of them. However alot of them are in weird places like just walking or someone just sitting. Would have preferred to have more animations in lewd and action scenes instead of these seemingly random spread and not so well cutted into regular scenes.
3. Dialogue is well written and for the most part has a good flow and seems natural and believable. However the banter in lewd scenes is bad, there is no dirty talk and aside from alot of ahhh and mmmh the characters seem to just be having a regular conversation while going at it.
4. The story is quite is all in all quite good and the way it is presented is also for the most part both engaging and interesting. As of chapter 4 there still alot of mystery going on and if it was not for my next point I would probably still be reading instead of writing this review.
The MC, as usual this is the place that most avn falls short and this one is no exception. So much so that he gets his own section of this review, since in my opinion almost everything bad about this novel ties into him.
1. The physical. Very much on the small side in both height and build for a man, as in he is pretty much the same size if not smaller than most of the girls. Does not at all fit with the whole sole protector of the town role he is supposed to have. Comes show already in one of the opening scenes as he is complaining about how hard it is to carry an unconscious girl, that he is rescueing, 20 meters. Not only does he carry her in like 4 different ways that are all wrong if not impossible, but as a policeman he should also have had that type of training and be in shape to do so. I also think the whole supernatural and horror aspect of the story would be much better if put up against a physically capable individual instead of a weakling, to show that despite his competence he is still way out of his depth.
2. Competence and choices. Straight away he makes poor choices, him driving home his pregnant girlfriend to stay at home alone at night when he knows there is dangerous people in town, to then go back and fall asleep at his desk while supposedly watching over an injured girl locked up in a cell is just beyond stupid. Then the choice on what girl to check in on before going home is just wtf, ofc you check in on both of them as you promised. Not only is it your job you also made a promise, but nah lets not keep it so we can get home what 20 min earlier. Then we encounter weird freaky people who are obviously dangerous and does not die even though you shot one of them 3 times in the head, and you dont think it is time to bring out more than just your handgun and do not want to break into the gun store to get more firepower, to not even talking about not even having a shotgun at a sherif department, a little logic please. The choices where you get 2 options and one just leads to game over is also completely pointless and add nothing to the novel. The choice where you chose between believing the squatter girls or the douche brothers also just is a prime example of what an absolute idiot mc is, like he knows these dudes are unstable and drunks so his solution as a police officer is to beat the guy up and tell him to leave them alone, not just illogical but also friggin illegal. Then we have the scene where 4 of these cultist fuckers march up unarmed to the police station and starts demanding to get the girl while throwing threats n stuff, and what does the marshal do, he fucking hides inside and tries to bargain with them. Why does anyone trust this guy to protect anything, he is so damn useless it makes me wanna vomit. Also the situation where he chases this woman to the border of town and he knows if she continue running she will die and he just yells stop, draw you gun fire a warning shot at her feet, hell even shoot her in the leg just friggin stop her from running into certain death.
3. Background and setup. Saddling the mc with a pregnant girlfriend who is obviously a sweet girl bordering on complete angel... is just a bad choice. Like why force the reader to play as a complete asshole to interact with the LI in the novel and to watch the lewd scenes that dev has put effort into making. Seems obvious that it is intended that mc should have relationships with several of the girls, but to do so he has to behave like a despicable garbage cheater. And it also makes Allison and the rest of the LI seem like a bunch ruthless cunts. Ofc I dont know if all this is intentional but it is for sure not my cup of tea. Add this to his other faults and there is pretty much nothing to like about this mc and he drags this whole novel down with him.
A few suggestions on how to improve this mess
1. MC needs to grow some balls and put on his man shoes, and while he is at it grow a head taller and gain 40 lbs. Nobody feels safe with a pathetic weakling in charge and it does not help the credibility of the story to have all the LI be delusional and praise him for being a good guy when he is a frikkin cheater. Let him be smart and manly cause his sissy ntr personality do not fit in this setting, hell it does not even fit with the cheater aspect of the character and it for sure does not fit with good guy protector man of the law perspective that most of the rest of the cast seem to have of him. I really want to continue the story but I just cannot when playing as a guy that pisses me of every time he needs to make a descision.
2. For the whole pregnant girlfriend setup to work, she either needs to be into the whole sharing her man thing from the start or there needs to be options for talking with her about it early on when other women start showing interest and thereby getting her on board. Otherwise you just lose all the audience that are not into cheating and still wanna see lewd scenes.
So to conclude this, if mc got a complete make over character model, choices, background everything except perhaps his face. Then this could pretty easily grab 4 or 5 stars, but as is he drags it down to not worth reading
